Per. 1

Thanks for the yummy breakfast. I want your papers tomorrow with your score and a justification.
A was a 6
B was a 3
C was a 9

On Being a Cripple

Yesterday, you wrote a timed write "On Being a Cripple"

Today, we will look at the AP rubric and some sample essays. 

On the back of you essay, score the sample essays and your own essay.

A - 1 sentence justification

B - 1 sentence justification

C - 1 sentence justification

your own paper - 3-6 sentence justification Use terms from AP rubric 

On Dumpster Diving text

Read and lightly annotate your text for

diction (is it simple, technical, complex)
style (philosophical, story - like)
(understatement: making something serious seem less {saying "it is cold" when it is 5 degrees}
syntax (structure of sentences and sentence length) ex: complex sentences next to simple, declarative sentences
examples: personal, researched, observations of behavior, descriptions of items

What effect do these devices create?
Ethos (credibility) look for statements where he uses "I" to convey his personal experience and establish trust
Pathos (what emotions does he evoke? nostalgia, sympathy, etc)
Logos (is this just a practical idea?)
Tone (use the tone sheet)

Bring your book on Monday October 21

be prepared to read, write and discuss with your group on Monday

Current Events paragraph due Friday

• Find a story that captures the theme of humanity or lack of humanity. 
• Use recent local, national, or international news, a ted talk, or other modern day writing. 
• Briefly describe the story and discuss how the theme of humanity exists in the story. 
• Argue why this is significant? (Is it politically, socially, economically relevant? Why?) 
• How does this connect with Ernie Pyle's piece (compare / contrast the message, delivery, effect, etc) 
• Record the source you used using MLA format (see easy bib)
• 1 sufficient paragraph in length typed or neatly written

2 paragraphs on "On WWII" Ernie Pyle

start a new google doc and title it __(per) first last name On WWII.
share it with me at jenmurphy11@gmail.com 
Per. 1 Paragraphs due Monday
Per. 4 & 6 we will write together on Tuesday


1st Paragraph Arrangement
Looking at structure as strategy and learning to write about you an author uses organization to convey his purpose.
How does Ernie Pyle arrange his ideas to convey his purpose?

1. Directions: choose 3 -4 significant chunks from Ernie Pyle's essay "On WWII" to discuss. In a paragraph, convey what the author is doing in each section and explain why. (Is he describing to evoke emotion, emphasizing to develop a deeper understanding of war - if so what is that new insight). Incorporate textual references and embed them into your sentences of explanation. Then explain who is he writing for and his purpose.  You might focus on using the following verbs
what the author is doing?                   why?
describes                                        to suggest
questions                                         imply
observes                                        to inquire / explore
emphasizes                                          expose
narrates                                          evokes
illustrates                                 to draw attention to
exemplifies                              illustrate
lists                                           exemplify
opens / closes                            introduce
shifts                                         to create
transitions to                            to develop meaning behind
____(adverb) conveys
ex: passionately conveys           to set a _______ tone

Your paragraph might look something like the following frame. This is only a suggestion.

Ernie Pyle "On WWII"

Sample Frame for Paragraph 1

In the _______(genre), ________(title), _______    (rhetor) __________(adverb) ______(technique - how does he present) ________ (his message). ________(Last name of rhetor) first (illustrates, exemplifies)________ in order to (expose, evoke, etc)______________. His focus then shifts to _____________________________ (revealing, exposing, etc) _______________________________________.

Carefully, Pyle then begins to sharpen the lens of his narrative and capture_________________ to (suggest/evoke/create _____ . The narration closes with ____________ (exemplifying, evoking) __________Pyle structures his essay like a ____________, reminding ___________(audience) of __________________(purpose). 

Example  excerpt for Paragraph 1       

 In the essay, “On WWII” Ernie Pyle vividly describes the aftermath of war. Pyle opens his essay with a description of a beautiful scene of the beach, including the objects that have been left behind in war (men “sleeping forever”)  introducing the stark reality of death that encompasses war. Pyle then shifts to list the quantity of items destroyed (“trucks”, “jeeps, and “lct’s”) objectively describing the destruction to expose the magnitude of loss in war. He then begins to transition towards his real purpose as he begins to describe the men on the beach as “expendable” suggesting that …..

How does Pyle use rhetorical devices to convey his message?

2. Paragraph 1 Write a second rhetorical analysis paragraph that focuses on what rhetorical strategies does Pyle uses to convey his message Instead of focusing on the whole chunks, focus on analyzing the specific diction (words and phrases) and syntax (sentences).

        Pyle first introduces the idea of  _________(subject) as he describes / opens his essay with ____ (first example). The ________(device) allows ____________ (what do you understand about the situation?).  Pyle continues to address the idea of _________________ (message) in his next example in which he states ___________, exposing / evoking / illustrating _________________________.
Later Pyle magnifies / strengthens / reinforces his message with the observation / description of _______________________(device & example)  conveying the idea that _____________________.
Through Pyle's use of __________(devices) he begins to suggest ____________________________. 

Pyle first introduces the tragedy of death in the first paragraph as he describes the men "sleeping forever." The abstract description allows death to appear peaceful on the surface, but the audience soon realizes the permanence and seriousness of war that is too often overlooked. This trivialization of soldiers' lives is later represented in his objective tone with his listing of concrete imagery, "trucks..jeeps...LCT's" creating a distant, mechanical feel to the tools men used to wage war. Pyle’s extensive description allows for the objectiveness to sink in before he returns to his first point about the costs of war, human life.  Pyle returns to this idea in paragraph 10, stating life was “expendable” reminding his audience that war has dehumanized men, allowing them to be “replaceable”. Pyle’s abstract word choice begins to suggest that humans should value more than victory and begins to evoke the commemorative tone to his piece.

Please have your books by Monday October 14

You have signed up to read one of the following books:
The Scarlet Letter
The House of Seven Gables 
The Journal of Esther Burr
Self-Reliance (Emerson)
Walden (Thoreau)

Email me if you have not chosen a book.

Dick Gregory "On Shame: SOAPSTONE due Friday 10/11 midnight

Share with me at jenmurphy11@gmail.com

Yesterday, we read Dick Gregory's "On Shame"
Read and Print out if you were absent.

We also annotated for the elements in the SOAPSTONE handout

Today we will compose a written SOAPSTONE see example

Please make sure you have a gmail account.

Create a new document

Title it ___(Per)first and last name "On Shame"

Subject: Discuss Gregory's identity and persona. Justify your interpretation with evidence (examples) and discuss how Gregory reveals these details to you (rhetorical strategies - i.e. simple diction, judgmental language, personal experiences, repetition, etc.)

Occasion / Context: Discuss the immediate occasion that spurred Gregory to write and the larger context / occasion (attitudes) influencing his writing. Where do you see this in the text?

Audience: Who is the work intended for? What groups might this pertain to? Bring evidence and explain how this is revealed in the text. (Rhetorical strategies)

Purpose: What does Gregory want us to think / do about _____(subject)? Provide and discuss evidence of where you see this in the text. What strategies does he use to elicit this idea?

Subject: In a few words, what is Dick Gregory's subject of focus? How does he present these ideas? What message is suggested? Refer to the text.

Tone: Discuss the tone/s that emerge throughout the text and illustrate this through example. 

Diction Spectrum Homework

Diction Spectrum Homework

So what is the difference between critical and condescending? Fat and overweight? Which one has more meaning?

1. Choose a favorite word (an adjective  works well) (somber)
2. Create a list of this word’s synonyms (melancholy, gloomy, depressed, cheerless)
3. Put these words on a spectrum in terms of their level of effect. (think about a scale from least intense (1) to most intense (10) cheerless, gloomy, depressed, melancholy) You can also select a neutral term and explore the positive and negative connotations.
4. Explain why you ordered your words in the way that you did in a comprehensive paragraph justifying your connotations.

10 points

_____ Explores synonyms in depth (10-15 options)

_____ Deviates from simplistic diction